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Carmel March 2008-06-21 ch 17,	abuseFantastic job on this chapter. Absolute genius :) Can't wait for more! ~Carm~
the kitten 2008-06-14 ch 15,	abuseaw, the knight in a shining srmour! how cute!
the kitten 2008-06-14 ch 13,	abuseSolanthe really is obsessed with her dead man, isn't she? I like your version of "the beauty and the beast", although I can tell that there's a big (and I mean BIG) difference from the real story, I like this one better. more exciting, more fantasy, and although there are fairies, this is not your typical fairytale. good job! keep it up!
2008-06-12 ch 17, anon.	abuseWhat? An update?! Well, THIS is rare... Brevity isn't bad, although you've got these large paragraphs that slow progress down. No grammatical errors I detected, but don't quote me on that. Nice writing, though - some really vivid imagery, not to mention great wordplay.
teardrop456 2008-06-11 ch 17, anon.	abuseTheir relationship reminds me of macbeth and lady macbeth, only with the roles reversed
TurtleBaby43 2008-06-11 ch 17,	abuseInteresting story! I'm highly intrigued by it, and I love your story line and your writing. Thanks for giving me a good read so far! Update please!
under the influence 2008-04-07 ch 1,	abusequite an intriguing beginning...seems kind of dark tho. I guess that's what you were going for though... LOL -- I'd kill for 62 reviews on my story (not literally, mind you...)
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-20 ch 16,	abuseMy favorite installment so far. Nice action - it was gripping, and the ending was great. I guess I'll have to wait until a certain author decides to put pen to paper again... Uh, or fingers to keyboard. lol Awesome writing, Kristi. "Ken"
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-20 ch 15,	abuseActually, to comment on your closing comment, I don't think a "normal" relationship would fit the story... This chapter was odd the way it started, considering the last left off abruptly and this one was slow to pick up the action again. As for the creature in the room, I thought the imagination behind it was great, although the transformation was a little over-done. Otherwise, good chapter. "Ken"
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-20 ch 14,	abuseThis chapter was good. I didn't think he freaked out enough to make her run away, though... The Nightwatcher was pretty cool - I like the descriptions there. Only two chapters left... "Ken"
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-20 ch 13,	abuseI didn't mind the brevity of this chapter - short can be good. What I really liked was the description of the "potion room" - very imaginative. That really made the chapter for me. You've got such a great imagination. The thing I don't really care for is the repeated mention of "faeries", which we never see and don't really know anything about. I think it would work better if these creatures either played a bigger role in the story or somewhat less than they already do - it's like they're vital characters but have gone AWOL. Not sure if that makes sense, but this chapter was good in terms of development. I'm sure all of this will be relevant later on too. BTW, she's got some type of necrophelia going on there... lol Keep writing, J ~ "Ken"
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-18 ch 12,	abuseTo begin my review, this sentence bothered me: "He remembered who Emmy reminded him of, and it was a painful memory." Very redundant, so another synonym or just simplification would work. Okay... As for the rest of the chapter. "Terebinth had recklessly attacked whom he thought to be Varin and killed him, but it had been a shape shifter by the name of Luminae, a self-sworn protector of Varin. Thinking Varin dead, Terebinth was shocked when he met Varin walking down a road." Is this information about the "shape shifter" really important later on down the road? If not, the idea just feels tacked on and irrelevant, not to mention somewhat cliche. "Memories were made to stay in the past. That’s where he wanted them." The verb tense has changed from past to present in these sentences. "She was intoxicating, infuriating, magnetic, beautiful, and breaking through the walls of his heart that no one ever dared venture past." The sentence has no parallel structure and is confusing to read. I would chop the sentence after beautiful, and begin with "She broke through..." just to make it sound balanced. "They were alike only in that a rose petal emerged from their hearts." This sentence is unnecessary - I, as the reader, have already made the connection that they both have the same mark. Uh, the progression was okay. I think her attitude towards Varin changed abruptly, almost too much. Their conversation seemed overly done in that sense, because suddenly the tension was different. I can't really explain it. Sorry it's been a while. I'm done with school until January, so I should have more time over Christmas break to finish what you've got here. In the meantime, keep writing! "Ken"
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-11 ch 10,	abuseActually, I thought a lot happened in this chapter, contrary to your note at the end. I think you do a great job revealing bits and pieces of the history involved in the story through memoirs and memories. Also, the character of Varin is one that needs this slow, drawn-out development. I have two complaints. First is the teleportation bit - it was a little too cheesy for my tastes, especially the dialogue that followed. Not that you have to change it to suit my preferences, but I think you - in your great imagination - could develop a better way of getting them up onto the tower. My second complaint is one that I think you've addressed yourself: I can't really see where this is going. I think I can hazard a guess at the ending, and I certainly don't want everything summed up in brief, but it seesm to me that the storyline tends to grow plodding from time to time. I think this story is great, though. I've never been a Disney fan, so I was certain I wasn't going to enjoy reading it, but you've proved me wrong in a good way. Keep it up, "Ken"
TheGreenPrincess 2007-12-11 ch 16,	abuse=O is Rune evil?? damn. STAB HIM! jk jk keep on updating! ^^
Kenny's Friend 2007-12-01 ch 9,	abuseThis chapter was good - no worries about the length. I was somewhat confused by the voice, although I'm sure it will be explained later. Finally, was the girl at the end in the castle, or somewhere else? And that was still 200 years ago, correct? Good work, as always.

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