|Reviews for The Unsavoury Character|
| Jacquleine Schaeffer 2/13/07 . chapter 6
Oh come ON, that HAS to be Thornton. Why isn't he talking to her? Damnit.
I think Lucille was smart to move on. That's what I would do! I mean, of course this is a romance and they're going to end up together (right?) but in real life, they never would, so it's totally smart of Lucille to move on. Also, Felton needs to give the hell up.
I hope to know soon exactly why Thornton is going abroad...I mean, there's a specific reason, right? Why didn't he tell Lucille? Rar.
| Jacquleine Schaeffer 2/13/07 . chapter 5
Earthy brown meeting cloudy grey. Very poetic.
I like the chemistry Thornton and Lucille have.
Also, I had a feeling Cecilia was his sister or something. Thornton should only have eyes for good ol' Lucille.
Anyway, this was the most exciting chapter so far. Lots of swashbuckling and the like! I enjoyed it.
| Jacquleine Schaeffer 2/13/07 . chapter 4
Another good one! The increasing feelings for Thornton seem very realistic. Although...why was he in an embrace with another chick? I also love how every story with a ball has a labyrinth of a garden. That's not a dig on you at all, it's just that it's the best place ever for a secret rendezvous, hahaha.
I also loved the proposal scene in the beginning. Her little comments after every one of his statements cracked me up. To me it was reminiscent of the proposal scene in Pride and Prejudice, the first one with Mr. Collins, which always makes me laugh.
On to read more! I love the length of your chapters. I hate when they're too long!
| Jacquleine Schaeffer 2/13/07 . chapter 3
Hey! Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while.
Your story is still great so far. Lucilla is a good character, she's not a wilting flower but she's not that cliche defiant, horseback-riding girl that everyone seems to write about and yet never existed. She's just defiant enough to be believable for the time period and interesting, too.
And I really like Thornton too. Very smoldering! Haha.
Anyway, I still would suggest more description; your story seems a little dialogue-heavy. But hey, it doesn't bother me that much, and I have the exact same problem in my writing, so I can't crtiticize you on that very much.
In any case, I'm going to read more.
| GentleTurbulence 2/8/07 . chapter 5
SwEeT! I'm so happy he wasn't cheating on her.
If there is one thing I despise,
it's a backstabber! plz update!
| unfinished 2/1/07 . chapter 4
I am reasonably suspicious of Felton... What is he planning? And who is this woman Thorton was with? His sister?
I look forward to the next chapter.
Also, good writing style. Decription is well used (e.g. hot from the crush of bodies)Also, the line "Lucilla shivered in delight at the contact" gave me goose pimples. Keep it up!
| May Hearty 1/26/07 . chapter 4
Ok, now Lucilla is being annoying. Who gave her the write to pick on Felton? If some guy was proposing to you you would not stand there ridiculing him! What a pig... for all she knows he might passionately love her and she is crushing his heart. Poor stupid Felton... Lucilla should kick her own ass.
Lucilla and Thorton are equally gits. They suit each other. Oh boo hoo he doesnt know whether to kiss her or not. If that is the worst thing he has to worry about he is doing pretty good for himself...
Lucillia is an idiot. How ridiculous to ask for him from a guy she recently refused the proposal of! She should have just gone and got drunk. That would have solved all her problems.
Yes I know I have been very mean to all the characters in this story but currently they all annoy me. I think I am just being a big grump ass. And a bitter cynic of love as a whole. Who just generally is out for some ass kicking.
Sorry if my reviews have kiced you off into the depths of despair (hee hee Anne of Green Gables quote). Feel free to yell at me.
| May Hearty 1/26/07 . chapter 3
Thorton is so BLAH. He's just like "Wah wah wah I know everything. Do what a say." He needs to take his head out of his own ass and take a look in the mirror. A long hard look. And then do a little dance. Which will only futher illustrate how stupidly annoying he is.
Anyhowzies, good good on the writing as (as annoyingly usual) but I think Lucilla needs more "umph". And should kick Felton and Thortons asses (their bums, not their donkeys). As they are both jerks.
| J.E.Wyatt 1/18/07 . chapter 3
Ah, what a delightful chapter this was! I hope you will update soon. And I found no grammatical error - I'm horrid at grammar myself.
| Gia Parker 1/15/07 . chapter 3
love it, like the way u develop the characters, pretty original way of doing it too, like the lil brother aspect as well
only thing...update more often
| fonkymonkey 1/14/07 . chapter 3
i love this story so far!
i love thornton. hes like the guy who annoys you but you can't help but like him.
the interactions between him and lucilla are really funny.
| Enigmatic Huntress 1/4/07 . chapter 2
He, he, I adore Theodore. I would have prefered Lucilla to be the one to verbally take Thornton down a few pegs though and perhaps rub it in his face a little.
He is a narcissistic misogynist! Ok, fair dues, maybe he doesn't "hate" women exactly but his comments are so downright rude and insulting, it's making my blood boil. I know women weren't treated equally back then but some Gentleman did at least treatt them with respect. Still, he's not exactly what you could call a Gentleman, is he? Despite my comments, I do find him rather amusing and I throughly enjoyed the fencing match and the fact he knew who she was the entire time.
My favourite character has to be Lucilla. She is outspoken, bold and has fire, which makes her exceedingly interesting to read about, especially when you put her in a room with Thornton .
This is really gripping so far and I'll be reading the next chapter, luv Kaitx
| Pink Parfait 12/20/06 . chapter 2
This is really very interesting!
| Pink Parfait 12/20/06 . chapter 1
What time period is this set in?
| WIM 12/16/06 . chapter 2
Cute fic. I like it alot. And im really happy that you made her loose the fensing - so she didn't become some marry sue! Good start to a story