Good, I think. The last two lines, especially: "It's all a cliche I'm told / But I don't hear, I fall apart." You have some meter problems, but I sense you were more focused on your rhyme and message--bot hof which are well done. It's never good if a writer gets stuck on rhyme and ends up saying nothing, thinking, "Well, at least it rhymes." No, because then it becomes crap. Anyway, you don't do that here. You rhyme and you make sense. You're also fairly creative (recoil/foil, repenned/mend), and that's very refreshing.

Nice job on this.

J