this is really abstract and i like that. its really good and i like the last line, it stands out to me. its interesting. great job!

ei! even if its very short! you made it look real..

great poem!

i like this a lot!! for some reason the last line [sugar, sharper than it looks] reminded me of this book [the secret life of bees] where the girls father makes her kneel on grits for long periods of time as punishment...this is very good...keep it up! :D

COOL! I love this! Great job! Heehe... Keep it up!