forgive me I read the reviews first.

It's certainly food for thought. Though I didn't click lord of the rings once, and I've read the books four times (over my lifespan).
I'm still thinking about what it could mean, and what I actually think of it. whatever that is it's good.
really good.

Love the words in this...

I have to say I love this one too!

of course this reminds me of The Lord of the Rings because I'm such a fan, but I'm really impressed you did so much with such few lines. You combined the truths of human nature with a mysterious Evlen way. It's very enjoyable to read.

~Harper K

my sister (a HUGE lord of the rings fan) would love this. i like it very much too, especially the sentiment behind it. "many falter before they fall" hit me more than anything...
thank you for the review you left on my other ID for "passing stars", it definitely made me smile too! but i feel i have to say that the line you loved wasn't mine (it's from "america" by simon and garfunkel).

Short and sweet.
I liked it. Even so, I'm not a fan for poetry, I just had to read yours after reading my brothers(RebelliousHeights), who did an amazing job on his poem! First, too.

Darkness certainly does descend the weary, everyday.

vivid and real... with a hint of, what i want to say is 'magic' but i don't know if that's the right word for it. it certianly is dazzling and gorgeous. i love how you ended it, it got a picture of someone walking on a road who is at a crossroad, or whatever it's called, and they're not sure which path to take. so they look up in the sky and then they just know, sort of like a guardian angel. either way, this poem was short but very powerful. keep writing!

"Darkness descends the weary" feels awkward, otherwise it's S&S.

I like the idea behind it but unfortunately the first line is just so cliched that it's even hard to read the rest.

The middle three lines aren't bad, short but not bad.

And then the end is unfortunately cliched. It also reads like a take on the Irish saying "the road will rise up to meet you." but I'm not sure if that was the intent.

When writing something so small, to create something interesting the best idea is to write creatively, not fall back on cliches.

Hopefully this is helpful.

.:midnight:.

This could almost be considered half poetry and half prayer. Reminded me of The Lord of the Rings. The first three lines could be a lament or something similar along those lines, and the last two lines reminds me of that bit before the Fellowship go down the river Anduin to the Falls of Rauros and Galadriel gives Frodo the Star of Ereniel, 'to protect you when all other lights go out.' I like this a lot. Great job here.

The only thing I would change is the last line 'when you road is long.' Should be, 'when YOUR road is long.'

good good,

hellbentheretic

This is one of your best ones. Love to read more.

Lovely.

NOTE:

This is a blunder that I wrote when I was updating my name as Elven Goddess of Leaf and Star. It was intresting when I wrote it. I hope that you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed to write it. Thanks so much for reading any of my work.


Best Wishes,

Tiffany Pradeep