I like the ending. "We are falling forever/We are spinning around" The last stanza has an eerie quality, kind of ethereal, if that can be used to describe the feeling of a verse of poetry. Song. Whatever. Hm.

The whole thing. Great.

Yes.

~Aquila

I quite like it but I think you could really cut down some of the less important words. There are lots of "when" and "and"'s that could be cut out to let the piece flow a bit better.

I do like how you frame the piece with repetition as well.

It's really nice to see you back.

.:midnight:.

I really like this.