sad story. tho really short. it need more.

wow that made me almost cry...your words are so strong and angry and i can feel the your emotions and it hit me hard in my heart. everything you said was very true and i agree with it. you wrote everything very well...saw a few grammar mistakes but whatever...its true though people do waste life and no one really appricites it. Whe life is good we take it for granted and then when something bad happens we act like the world is falling apart and dont even think about the good times. few people do but thats just the rotting world we live in. humans are horrible i know someone would say well ur human too yes i am and i know the dark thoughts in my mind...i dont act upon them but i write...writting is always the answer for the pen is mighter than the sword..lol i love that quote...god im rambaling now..i liked it alot it was beautifully written and as ive already said it touched my hard and almost made me cry
~Rei~

it's very...vauge. you dont really explain anything so i cant really tell whats going on but i guess if its a start to something then that would be ok cause the events could be explained later. but also when you said the man shot at him i dont think u mentioned he had a gun or anything or less you meant shot at with his fist but it helps to specify. i could probably say more about it if i knew more about it but i dont so thats all i can say. i like it though. it has alot of suspense and and a feel of mystery ^^

~Rei~

OMG! that one brought tears 2 my eyes! *wipes tears* that is so romantic & sweet, i... *tries 2 stop crying* i really like it!

ur good with sad romance

wow that's sad