good old memories :D
i love this story, it was one of my very stories i read in this site :D
i really hope you update soon i miss this story so much

I had to pause in the middle of chapter two when I came to this paragraph:
"The villagers stared in wonder as the small girl began to cry, quietly at first, but soon the sobs shook her body. Her features so features so perfectly reflected sadness that everyone else felt a new pang of grief on her behalf. Lucius sat down and took his daughter into his arms as she cried. When her tears died down, she sat beside him, face blank and doll like again. The coffin closed and he drew a sharp breath. He would never see his wife again from that day forward, only the echoes of her in his daughter."
The first sentence in particular is like trecle, and while your writing isn't always so sickly sweet, it would be good to steer away from that entirely. It makes no sense that the villagers would be "in wonder" or otherwise surprised that a girl should cry over her mother's death. She's realy pretty, we get it, but having her perfectly perfect face be perfectly sad is excessive and, at best, says you think your reader didn't believe you the first half-dozen times you mentioned how beautiful Tess is.
Description is great, but telling us over and over the same thing with different words doesn't help the story along. And you do have a good start of a story, which is why it would be such a shame to have Tess turn out to be a Mary Sue (martyr variant).
How about:
"The villagers sat in silence, shifting uncomfortably in their seats as Tess lingered at the coffin and began to cry. She quickly went from sniffles to sobs that echoed in the meeting hall, which moved a few people to begin tearing up anew. Lucius brought Tess back to their seats and held her for a few minutes until her tears subsided and she abruptly returned to sitting upright, blank-faced as she had been since Meredith passed in the night. He drew a sharp breath as one of the elders closed the coffin— it was the last time he would ever see his wife outside of what was echoed in Tess."
It's not the best example, but it plays less on the villagers who have grown up with Tess being universally moved by her beauty and uses actions to portray the shared grief without totally eviscerating the style up until that point.

hello, i know its been awhile since ive reviewed. I disappeared off of fictionpress (college can do that to ya) and i just returned and i seemed to remember about a story bout a dragon and a female knight and i gasped! lol. i see its been quite some time since u updated...im all caught up now with the story and i once again must remind u that...we're waiting for the next chapter!

pairings? goldie-blue
peepsie-ponnochio (?)
redd-wolfe
tess n landon (obviously)

are we gonna see ona and favien again in this story?

anyway update already!

--The Noodle ^__^

this was so good

Your story is wonderful! I love how you've put such a spin on all the fairy tails. It's very imaginative, and it's great how you haven't just jumped into the romance like many writers would do. Great writing :)

O the sleeping beauty and the fight against the dragon in the center of the dark forest...me like! :D

O...warrior princess Snow White who face huge spiders all by herself...they reminded me of Aragog from the Lord of the Rings, you know. The one that was feared all over Gondor... *chuckles*

And ohh...the evil queen suddenly sound pretty to me o..o I must be quite twisted myself o..o

ROFL! I knew you like to bunch up regular fairy tales together, but the Snow White! LOL! And you realized the sevens dwarves too! Ohh...this will get interesting...

Hi, I really like this so far. I am reviewing because I really don't think you should give up on this story or anything. It's great! I usually don't even start to read incomplete stories because I know I will be depressed when they suddenly disappear, or even worse - just sit there and rot. But this one was just too interesting to resist.

Please update soon!

I just happened to look at the character pictures and I love them both... Landon's picture is very...pretty? I love it a lot but I don't know if I should call it hot or cute or pretty or what. Anyways I hope you update this story. Please don't give up on it!

Well...I'm back! I kinda left for a while but I've returned and progress has been made! yay! lol. Ok as everyone is saying, i love the Tess and Ladon pairing...i don't think they're cute rather, they're...realistic...you know with Tess still having a bit of the dmsel in distress air and Ladon wanting to do everything to help her...I'm concerned though, because i think Tess is taking a bit too long to grow up. I mean i know she has a whole lot on her plate but...she still seems a bit too childish...just a teensy weeny tiny bit. Still loving Ladon! And yes, the Ona/Favien pairing would definitely be one of my all time favourites in this story...oh and please, don't let Tess end up with Mikhal, she may be naive but she's better than that. I don't think she's quite worthy of Ladon yet, just to become a bit more mature would be good, just a bit. Generally though, you have the pacing down pat (although i must say i prefer the other chapters than these last few ones with Mother Goose and stuff...), the writing is good and overall keep up the good work...

wow...
this chapter reaveld alot...
i never suspected this...
you surprise me everytime...
i really love this...
you really should update...
they almost kissed!
ur story is what i have beening looking for its so uniqe
please UPDATE

Haha, you've won me over on Redd with Wolfe.

And do you want any constructive criticism? If you do, I'm confused on some of the wording.

In the second paragraph, do you mean 'Rebelling just to rebel,' meaning 'Rebelling just for the sake of rebelling?' The rest of that sentence is a bit confusing to me, as well.. 'He didn't believe in just be accepted wasn't doing anyone a lick of good' is a run on sentence if I am correct.

And when it says 'it was clear sailing to the stone structure,' could you mean 'smooth sailing?' I'm not familiar with 'clear sailing.' Just my input if you'd like it.

You said before that Disney's Hercules wouldn't really be into this, but I absolutely love a Persephone/Hades pairing. Hades makes me giggle like a fangirl. But not the whole 'kidnap' thing and with Persephone royally unhappy. There are records of stories w/ Persephone content with the Underworld, so it doesn't have to be a sob story X3 Seems a bit of a stretch to incorporate, though, doesn't it? No matter, I like the pairings you put in.

i love this story!
i have never read anything like this before...
this a great story...
i love your tess and lladon pairing they're cute..
i would loved to read the next chapter...
this is only a draft...? well i love ir...
hope you UPDATE SOON

Cool. It's Cinderella this time, Not bad. I guess that it will be the Little mermaid the next time. Let's see first...