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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-07 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting poem. I love the conciseness of it. Just really clever word choice, and every word means something, as they should in a poem. Nice work. Keep writing! :) |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuseHm we have some nice vocabulary in this piece. Original. It reminds me of death. I dont know if that is what you were going for. "petrified ailments." It just says something died... or is about to... a coma. I like the title though. Maybe thats why it struck me as odd. I would love to hear what inspired you to write this piece. Did you see something? Story? I am just curious. |