 no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-14 . chapter 1I am loving the sound in this poem - the vowel sounds through this are, for the most part, either abrasive ("daggers," "sneaky mirror") or soft and welcoming ("erotic," "terribly tumbling"), and the alliteration is fantastic ("softly speaking salty secrets"). You use interesting words, and the title is just wonderful. Great work. Keep writing! :) |