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| SAKoi 2007-06-27 ch 1,  | abuseGreat rhyme and rhythm, i liked how it was themed with egg-ness |
| lux in tenebris 2006-12-28 ch 2, | abuseSweet! I liked that a lot. I love poems with hidden words and meanings... I'm one of those people that read mysteries and spend the hours I'm NOT reading trying to figure out "whodunit." |
| Reaper 2006-12-18 ch 2, | abuseWow. Deep. Awesome. Buzzy. Food. I love how everything has ore than one meaning. And the way the lines are pronounced, that was good. I picked up on offense and greed while first reading it, but just thought they sounded familiar, I never thought that was the intended point and that each line had it. Keep going. ~Reaper |
| scotti 2006-12-09 ch 2, | abuseWow, what a unique and orginal poem you've created here! It was like a mini-treasure hunt for the mind: find the hidden words, connect them, and discover their meaning. I have to admit though, that I had to read it several times( and do so out loud) before I found them... I managed to get all but one. I also found the 'egg' theme used through out, ingenious (if not a bit humorous,for I too thought of a bunch of humpty dumpties sitting at a table)but also brilliant. What better way to describe a feast being attented by a bunch/dozen(get it?) of rotten men than with an egg? I think this is absolutely by far, one of your best 'non-satire', thought-provoking type pieces yet and it carries such an important message too if one cares to dig a little deeper and look past the surface. I believe Mr. Ledbetter would be proud to know that he has inspired someone to find new life and meaning in poetry. Well done Satire, well done! ~Scottie |
| Orual 2006-12-09 ch 2, | abuseOh, the hidden words are really neat. It's amazing what one can weave into poetry. I rather liked the poem itself, as well. It's an accurate, though unfortunate, picture of society. |
| Sting Ferdinand 2006-12-08 ch 1, | abuseOo! Oo! I love it! I really do! One tiny question: I think I understand why you hid the words offense, negligence, miserliness, distress, greed, rensetment and malcontent, but why the word "mislead"? That was all. Above all, props. |
| Insanity Lord 2006-12-07 ch 2, | abuseOops, I was wrong. At least I got the egg part right. Oh well :P |
| Insanity Lord 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuse...Egg! Am I right? Well, I'll soon know because I'm about to read chapter 2! |
| EmptynessFilled 2006-12-07 ch 2, | abuseAnd I was right! Gluttony! I kinda just took "eggly" to mean humpty dumpty like...you know, fat. |
| EmptynessFilled 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuseGreat old style poem! Fits perfectly with other works in our Lit book. Of course, I don't understand one bit of it, though I'm pretty sure it has to do with gluttony. Let's see if I'm right! |
| Bob Evans 2006-12-07 ch 2, | abuseWhoa, I had no idea you had such deep meanings behind your works. I am even further impressed! ~Bob Evans |
| Bob Evans 2006-12-07 ch 1, | abuseM! Mind if I join in the feast? Well I have to say you've got a poet in you! Good work! ~Bob Evans |