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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-11 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting idea. I do like all three of these - I think the first one the most. "choke the coastal dry docks" is a fantastic image and use of sound. The second one has tons of alliteration and I love that. The third is a solid scene, which is fantastic. Great work. Keep writing! :) |