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| d666lisa 2008-05-18 ch 1,  | abuseI love this story, it flows very well :) |
| x3life 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseaw this was cute!! haha =) |
| Lily Llynn 2008-05-03 ch 1, | abuseHahaha. The italics are distracting but they kinda work. I like this, it's sweet, and even though it's short, I can tell this is well-written. Cute and hilarious voice. Love found.eventually for suggesting this and you for writing it. Enough talk now, I'll go add it to my c2. (: |
| SparklingStar25 2008-04-02 ch 1, | abusewow. |
| found.eventually 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseHaha. Whoa. I love the narrator's thoughts. The things we do for love. *sigh* Like that time I had to nod and PRETEND my boyfriend can sing. :/ Awful. Loved it, loved it! :) |
| SilverTwilight 2007-12-08 ch 1, | abuseThis could have turned out to be a mushy romance blurb, but instead it shows the unpleasant sacrifices of love (that in this case taste horrible). Creative and truthful. Good job. ~ Dx |
| SamanthaNicole 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseOh, the things we do for love. Seriously, I think everyone's pulled this one at least once, be it for a boyfriend, husband, mom, grandma, et cetera. Loved it. And the way you incorporated the narrator's thoughts was hilarious. Definitely enjoyable. Cheers, Sammy |
| D-Mish 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abusehaha hilarious. also, i went on my friends fanfiction and you had left a review. you gave her some constuctive critism and i would really like that if you could give that to my most recent story since no-one will. ( I dont mean to sounds pushy or anything but i'd really appricate it. :) anyway love your work! |
| AmorphousHeart 2007-08-29 ch 1, | abuseVery cute and amusing. I liked how you integrated the narrator's personal thoughts into the story. Very seamless. Good job! |
| Angelfacekrys 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abuse*giggles* very cute. Romantic. Ah, the things we do for love... **hums song by 10CC** |
| Her Wishing Well 2007-06-25 ch 1, | abuseCute and odd contrast though. |
| Operation Miranda 2007-05-09 ch 2, | abuseVery cute concept. I'm interested to see if you'll add anymore to this, because I think it'd be interesting if it were switched up a bit. I mean, I know some girls who are horrible cooks. Maybe a girl cooking for her boyfriend (or husband) would throw in some gender analysis while still showcasing the great diversity amongst couples as the first two chapters seem to do. |
| Crystal109 2007-03-23 ch 2, | abuseWow. I love the contrast to the first chapter. I must admit, though, I'm rather confused as to whether these are the same people from a different perspective and a different time or if it's another couple with a different kind of ending. My AP Lit analysis that I'm learning is coming in handy here, haha. The similarities and differences with chapter 1 is just amazing, and it's really interesting to see how nothing is truly perfect. I hope you provide an interpretation of what you were thinking, though, because I'm really interested in whether or not I'm even close to that kind of analysis. =) It would just suck if I interpreted everything differently, and it always makes me feel bad when I do, kind of like insulting the author in a way. Well, looking forward to more from you! (And wow, sorry for the long review. For such a nice, short, concise chapter, I provide such a long convoluted review...my apologies.) =) |
| aragon asten 2007-03-06 ch 1, | abuseundeniably swet |
| Luv and Peace 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abuseAw...cute. |