This is nice, I love your diction and way you arrange your words! Wonderful! Your very talented! Keep Writing.

~Meaningful Words from the Heart~ A.R. Connelly

The voice in this connects the reader so closely to the situation. I think the authors note helps to provide insight into the individual-situational aspects of the work, but greater than that this work can be interpreted into a wide variety of other viewpoints and perspectives. It is both the narrow-the speakers scene-and the broad-the way that it could relate to so many other characters-that draws the reader in with the commonality of thought. Marvelous pace set up by the audible voice that resonates so clearly through this work. Very well written due to the duality of the individual and social scope that this achieves. Excellent return. MD:77.

I truly have missed your wonderful writings and wondered why there were no new poems posted, but this and the author's note made much clear. The poem is beautiful and poignant, but I am sorry it had to come to you like this. But perhaps it will turn out for the better... Thank you once again for all reviews.

Interesting poem. I think your author's note at the end really helps to solidify the poem, help us understand why you wrote what you did and why you're writing again now. I'm sorry that things didn't work out with this person (I'm assuming that's why you're writing again, and you can feel free to shoot me or something if I'm wrong). The way you've written this poem is fantastic. The mud on floors metaphor is one I used in a poem once, as well, and I think it really does work. (That poem is "Circle," in case you care to compare/contrast our use.) Anyway, I'm glad to see you back because I do love your work, but I'm sorry it has to be under such circumstances. Keep writing! :)