The jury is still out about this poem. I dont know how i feel about it because it is so...obscure to me.

I dont understand "crimson ease."
was that supose to be a vampire referance?

sorry for the hasty review, but i cant get anything more out of this.

Vince Loring

i like how you've made poverty into a sort of living thing... it's kind of scary. it's an interesting thing to write a poem about - i haven't encountered many poems that deal with poverty. (no, scratch that, this is probably the only one.)

hm... maybe it's just stylistic, but in the 6th line "poverty is like an icy rain," i would take out "like." you started the poem with "poverty is the spirit..." and i think it might be more effective if you continued with that kind of strong language.

interesting how you start out with a question, too. i personally wouldn't do it, but i think it works well with this poem.

i like it short - you don't take too many words to say what you want to say. :)

anyway, good job! (if this isn't in depth enough... i'm sorry! i don't often review poems...)

-Lefty

Yeah! The friends/stars poem! It makes me very happy. "Falling for you" was fun, too. I imagine you flopping over multiple times in his presence. he he--Evie

Eek... *shudders*. Morbid once more. AND I LOVE IT! HAHA... okay. I'm done. I liked it. Alot.

~Kat

Do you like sand? Sorry. Just wondering. I suppose it can be used as a good metaphor and all. I mean, it's so much more than tiny grains, you know? It was morbid. I enjoyed it. Morbid's my middle name... hehe... okay Kathleen, stop freaking them out.

~Kat

God I'm jealous. You suck. I hate you. How can you write such awesome poetry. I'm so ashamed of my stuff. Shesh. I hate you.

~Kat

I like it. It's very truthful. Now, I'm not a non fiction writer. To put it simply- I suck at it. But anyways- enough about myself. You put poetry in a way that it's truthful, but not boring like "Oh my God, let it be over!" no. It's very good. Not many people can do that. Not even me... hehe... I'm kidding. Okay people, please don't think I'm self absorbed... I'M NOT! Hehe... I think I need to stop.

~Kat

This one was good too. I liked it alot.

you know what? you know who I am, I'm going to stop signing my name.

That's funny. Really funny. I'm being serious. No, honestly. It was funny.

~midnightjoy

This one's my favorite. Really amazing job. You have a gift.

~midnightjoy

I liked this one. It describes sand in a poetic way. Nice.

~midnightjoy

I wrote a poem about poverty. Yea, it's on here, but it's nothing like this one. You did a good job.

~midnightjoy

I like the rhyme of this, though foxes just aren't my kind of animal.

Good poetry is hard to write. YOur poems all have intersting shapes, which just adds to the amazing idea that you expresise well. In some ways, The poems are all quite similar, but all still very intersting in there own way. I especially liked the first poem, What is poverty. not so hot on the jolt poem

The review throttle wouldn't let me review Fox, sorry, so here is two in one.
Fox:
It reminded me of my poem, "Serpent"
Jolt: My Favorite. :)
SON (Nephthys)