 pixieofdarkness 2006-12-14 . chapter 1wow, this had a lot of emotion in it, i could feel it, and very nice on the rhymes my dear, they are very good, and love the comparison.*adds to favs* |
 felicia13 2006-12-11 . chapter 1The last line is nice. "For without emotions, man is a sham" It's a true story and it just has a nice ring to it. Just dandy, Shane.
And ... since you pretty much know my feelings on this already (or do you?) I'll make this short. It's good and I like it and I think that the one word lines are nice because they add extra emphasis where it's needed. High five!
Love,
Felicia. |
 Sakka-Fenikkusu 2006-12-10 . chapter 1AMAZING. POWERFUL. I WORSHIP YOU.
No, really. This is going on my C2 community. |
 WickedSilence 2006-12-08 . chapter 1To tell you the truth, at the beginning I was wondering where you were going with the whole "emotions" spin. And I was wondering where the good part of feeling would come in. Then, wonderfully, I discovered the spiritual progression of your poem near the end. The way you leave the reader hanging is creative, I think, because it mirrors the surprise the speaker himself/herself would suddenly stumble upon this truth. It's good. Keep up the good work! |
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