i had to read this one twice to get the full concept. From what i can tell, it is true not many see the beauty they have yet to smile about in this world they live in. if you have a really well explained thought on what this was written for i would love to hear it in an email :)

~Sorrow

ah the joys of babysitting. lol yeah right. i hated it myself unless it was with a young one that was actually calm.

~Sorrow

yet another good paragraph from you. if theres one thing i've missed while being away was how well you write :)

~Sorrow

i like the imagery in this paragragh about the pen and then life. very good stuff.

~Sorrow

very good stuff. that is a good question. spared blindless...or cursed with sight. it is true, we all are monsters, but different in many ways. very good work! keep writing!

~Sorrow

another great piece. noon does fly to midnight without anticipation.

~Sorrow

a very unique piece of work. its true...people don't see the beauty in old things, or things of use. just things they want that have no use. great job.

~Sorrow

a very interesting piece. i like it.

~Sorrow

very good detail. its weird how the other person is happy, yet the guilty truth is, you're not. you know? very great stuff you.

~Sorrow

very interesting way to overcome someone's fears. but a very good way for people to look at it in a different perspective. good work!

~Sorrow

you know, this brought tears to my eyes...not only because it was a superb piece...but because i just went through this, the only difference is she and i are a year apart. me...the gentlemen, her the young learner. and some how...things never happened you know? urg sorry i shouldn't rant like that. i should review. GREAT WORK DARLIN'!

~Sorrow

definitely good stuff here. you're right. nothing is forever. you play it along and the only way to see the end, is well...to survive.

~Sorrow

a really interesting short piece. I wonder what it was that dropped from his hand.

this is really good. I like how you put a kind of story line based middle and then ended in poem form. great work!

~Sorrow~

Against me.
Another clever and fitting title.
You seem like someone who writes directly from your head; it all plays out as you're writing it. "Looking it up in a half chipped reflection and I find myself." That sentence doesn't make much sense on its own. It doesn't really express complete thought. But, because of things like that, you write very effectively and always seem to have the right word. It seems like the speaker is saying it all really, really quickly and vehemently because it's like you wrote it really quickly and vehemently, see? And so it finishes as this great paragraph that makes your audience feel exactly what you wanted them to because you didn't dillute the pure thought with structure/attention to grammar/etc. Good job with this!

But something that you could change without compromising style: "yet to real and over-bearing all the same..."; it should be "too".