Hey, I haven't been on for while so sorry it's taken so long to review this chapter. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, and you write well, it makes me want to read more, when are you putting up more chapters? Oh and could you review The Betrayal agiain for me please? I deleted it from my account and had to upload it again, but i've rewritten the prologue. Keep writing.

Hey, I thought it was great again, and your imagination was good.I liked the first paragraph and the detail into it. There were one or two thingd I though you could change though. You put in the second paragrpah, his name was Tristian. I didn't really think that it flowed with the rest of the story, maybe you could change it to Tristian was, by most standards. You also put when he attacks the assailant, he had high morals when it came to killing and taking life was not something he revelled in. You should put a comma after killing. Also when you describe the Three Arrows Inn the sentence is really too long, and there is another long sentence further in. Other than one or two typos it was great, I make loads so dont worry. I'll review the rest tommorow, I live in the Uk and it's pretty late now and i'm tired.

Hey, I read it and thought it was really good. There were one or two typos thought, when you describe the demons, you put at the start that he had seen their true form one before. I think you missed out the c in once. Also in the first paragraph, there is a massive sentence near the start. You could probably break it up a bit. Other than that I couldnt see anything. Your creativity is great, their names are really good. I thought maybe you could describe Idris, Ezreal, Conn and Albany a bit mroe, but maybe that comes later on. The plot is really good so far, I'm pretty hooked.