Another great chapter.

Man, I'm so glad you updated. Really interesting that you put the grandfather's story in there.

Did notice some minor spelling mistakes, plus i wanted to say that with ancestors, you probably meant descenders {first part of story}

Keep up the good job and happy 2009

Very sinister chapter here, I liked the increasing paranoia Stephen had over the father.

Finally I have the time to write a review!

Well, let me tell you, I am a very busy person, but when I started to read your story, I got so excited about reading it, that I printed it all out so I could read it on the train on the way to school. I noted so many things on those papers, and they are far too many to write down. Let me name a few:

At first I was skeptical about your use of language, but I came to love it, and found it necessary even. I do have to say that I frequently found spelling / grammatical errors.

Also, I love the story plot. I found it intriguing how you put suspicion on a few people (during the Crucifix period) and then later found out it was Gaznik, which made sense when that was revealed.

I like the friendships you've established. All in all I like the characters and the sarcasm that is part of their everyday lives. I especially liked that they didn't think of themselves as superheroes, and that they thought about the CIA possibly kidnapping them, if they found out.

One thing I especially have to compliment you on is the way you describe the how-do-you-call-it? "murders" that occur. I could practically picture it as a movie playing in my head, while I still felt horrified, but I couldn't stop reading. And I have to compliment you, because I rarely encounter writers that write those scenes as good as you do.

Also I like the story plot. It's rich and deep, and despite the horror that rest upon this little town, there's also the blooming flower of romance, and I do have to say that I like romance.

Sorry if my review is a bit messy and all, but I'm trying to summarize everything that I wrote on the printed version of your story into something small and understandable.

Well I hope you continue to write this and that in the end you'll make a game out of thing. I can totally picture this as a game.

PB

So the Graysons are gone for good... that's sounds awful if I say it outloud. But I had a feeling Joel was going to die. Anyway, this chapter's really intense (you sure know how to call 'em) and you always leave with a cliffhanger... Hm, the green sweat thing is puzzling. Not sure why they're sweating green all of a sudden...

Yes, I agree, you sure know how to write an action scene. I wonder what dark event you'll write up next. Luckily, my hunch when the "hypodermics began flying around everywhere" wasn't true, but I have a feeling this one's gonna come true...

I was drawn in immediately. Your weaving and bobbing around the actual issue leaves me hungry for more. YAY! My #1's a writer ♥

WOW!! It's so real and emotionally raw,(which is a good thing). you managed to make me cry...again. :-)

Over the span of the last few days I've been reading the past two chapters, mainly 'cause I keep losing the computer to other people in my home. XP So I'll just make my usual critics.

There were actually a number of small scale mistakes in the past two chapters; stuff like pushed together words, missing letters and so on. The biggest thing I found was that there was no divider interupting Brian about to read the page and the section about Greg Grayson.

Other than that, interesting and action filled chapters these two were. A lot has happened and it does feel as if the plot is escalating to some traumatic heights. I'd also like to say I can't place who you intended to kill off and who you didn't, and that's always a good thing.

My only complaint has to do with the whole Brian and Celine thing. Personally, I think their relationship changed over to romantic a little too quickly. It just seemed to develop in a few chapters. But that's only my opinion, stuff like that is delicate and I could've just interpreted it wrong.

Oh, and I also read your last review about the dialogue. Technically, it is correct to use periods as it is with commas when using quoatations. Just not in cases like:
"Hello!" Joe said happily, "How are you?"

Craptastic example, but the comma before happily is used more effectively than the period. I suppose the period would be correct too, it's just telling the person to stop and not letting the tag continue. If you know what I mean. XD I'm sure you do, but I think I lost myself.

Anyway, great job! I hope you update soon.

Hey! It's been a while, ey?

Anyway, just wanted to say you got the action scenes in the beginning down really well!

Though, not really sure on the grammar of this one, I noticed you tend to use "Insert dialgoue here." Dialogue tag here.

As opposed to, "Insert dialogue here," Dialogue tag here.

I prefer to use a comma, myself, but I'd thought I'd mention it. Can't say what the propar usage is, might look it up.

SO

New reader! Man, this story deserves way more reviews. Damn the cliffhanger.

Is Brian really going to fight Absorphan in his human form? WITH HIS TWO FISTS? AH - I worry. He should accidentally knock Celine out and then turn/change/evolve/whatever you call it. I can never remember any of their monster names apart from Ogouferay but I'm trying. Keep it up! I really like this story. Definitely one of the best ones out here!

AH! You can't just leave me there! That is evil. Speaking of evil, how do you pronounce "Ogouferay"? It's been bugging me for the past few chapters. Cool villan by the way. I have a feeling that Brian's going to have some troubles, ne? If not with Absorphan, than Ogouferay. Anyway, excellent chapter!

Awesome chapter! I like your library field trip. Heh, a reporter hating a place of information. I probably shouldn't be caring as much as I do about a library, but demonology? There's a section for demonology?
Oh, and Ryan is totally cool. I like your Darkhurst team a lot. but it's been a while since I've read, so I'm going to have to go back and refresh my memory. There's a lot of detail that I have to re-remember...

Man, I really missed reading this story. I must say, Absorphan is the epitimy of cool. Wouldn't want to get on his bad side... I like how you fixed things between Tommy and Brian, but I feel as if he's coming back... Anyway, great chapter! *thumbs up*

Good story. But I say that about most things. No I'm just kidding I actually like it. Thanks for the story

Hey! Nice chapter here. Felt like a filler to me but not bad. :)