Reviews for Hunted like an animal

Reviews For: Hunted like an animal

wolfblood82 2007-08-05 ch 2,	abuseHeya there! It's me again! Well, thanks for your latest reviews. They really made my day... anyway, I'll have to say that this story seems like something coming out from a psycho flick. Basically nothing to complain here... just one issue here I want to make known here and that is, IMO, to have a psycho killer wielding katana in this present age don't really seems logical. I thought maybe he would hold a gun or a knife. IMO, that will be more understandable. Also, I think it will be better to put your characters' profiles within the story than reserving one chapter totally for that. This, however, is my own personal preference, so you can ignore it if you want to lol! XD Anyway, my brain's gone a bit occupied, so don't know what to say here now. Anyway, hope I don't sound too mean for the katana part here. Again, thanks for your reviews and hope to see more of them soon! ^^ Bye! :)
believe-in-futures 2007-06-07 ch 2,	abuseHm. More violent then I personally like and as a result I skimmed some of this so if some of the questions I have are answered in the text I apologize: How does he know her name? I got the impression that he had just escaped from prison and she had simply accidentally walked in on him doing something 'bad'. Why did you open with the RolePlay type introductions? They aren't necessary. The story stands on its own - it doesn't really matter what kind of jeans she is wearing. I've never come across that in writing before. The dialogue "Oh no, this is the swamp" seems completely out of place - I can't see myself saying something so obvious if I was running for my life. Maybe a swear word or something - short and simple. You do a very good job of portraying emotions without ever flat out saying "she was scared" or something similar. It adds to the feeling that the reader is watching the whole thing from a distance which I don't particularly like but you do it very well. The description is excellent. Cheers.
MC25 2007-01-08 ch 2,	abuseAwsome story! Very descriptive, i could feel every inch of Kristen's pain and Shawn's pleasure! It just feels like the story isn't over or something, like more people need to die. You should keep writing! Thanks 4 the reveiw!
lonestar 2006-12-30 ch 2,	abuseYou're nasty! That was so sick I can't even describe it. Also, I do believe I saw Kristine's jewelry on your neck and ears. How dare you rob a corpse? You just nasty! Anyway good story.
Sylverie 2006-12-14 ch 2,	abuseTotally awesome! I mean you completely freaked me out ... I was sort of hoping that Kristine would somehow manage to escape. Ah, well, what you have was wonderful. What you have written is poignantly powerful. Your descriptiveness made shivers creep up and down my spine in absolute fear because you reminded me that there really are serial killers just waiting for the next prey. Anyways, superbly written! :)
>ryn-kun! 2006-12-13 ch 2, anon.	abuseOMFG... This story was very nice. I really liked it. By special request can you do a sequel to this story. I want to see how the criminal is caught or is killed by someone looking for revenge for Kristine's death. In all the story was great, unlike that Nyzal's story crap you keep pushing (just kidding, I enjoy Nyzal's story). The ending was a real world/real life ending which had my imagination thinking through out the story how would she kill him and get out alive, so to see that end to the story wasn't what I was expecting so I liked it in a weird way. The only thing I want to point out to you is when you said the killer had a sword then you said Katana later on. I think it would have been better if he had a plain sword because it was unlikely that he would have a Katana, a regular sword would fit into the story better. Anyway, that is just what I think. my rating is a 5 out of 5. (*) :)
Justin-Mullins 2006-12-10 ch 2,	abuseInteresting story. Descriptions are clear enough where I didn't get lost after the second paragraph and find the need to reread something to understand what the heck is going on. (hey it happens) So that's always a plus. There were a few minor grammar problems, such as when Kristine tells Shawn he's crazy. The word "your" should be "you're", but I'm sure you did it like I tend to do and just get so involved in typing you didn't even realize it.

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