 a bitter kiss. 2007-05-28 . chapter 1Thanks for reviewing Mint & Pepper! I'm here to return the favor!
First off, this was hilarious! Haha, I loved the line 'befriend my sister, you have my heart'. It reminds me of the spice girls.
"If you wanna be my lover, you gotta get with my friends..."
Hahaha! And yes, it's very anti-cliche. Where the new guy goes up to her and everything. Most cliches would make him smile, then cue the wobbly knees. A cliche would make him sit in front of her, and he'd look back and say something work, cue in dropping of pen.
Haha! Thanks for the read! |
 Rhice 2006-12-20 . chapter 1I wonder why 'cliched love stories' are so predictable yet for most of the part are usually likeable ._? I guess it's one of the unsolved mysteries of life we have to go through o_.
Anyways, a plus in exchange for the 'cliche' factor, your writing is rather good. Fluent and not wordy (some writers seem to love ingesting thesauruses); makes good storytelling to me.
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter. (: |