I like it. The sotryline itself is good but right now it's bones. When cartoonists draw, they draw sticklike figures and they only have the bones first and they draw around the bones so they don't have any problems with legs being too short or anything. Right now, you have a good set of bones and you need to flesh them out a little more and add more depth. Also the beginning was pretty confusing and I couldn't follow it at all. If you add more detail and flesh it out a bit more and make it clearer when a new section is starting, it will be an excelent story ; )

...Interesting.

:) CD