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| super happy nuclear girl 2007-05-21 ch 1,  | abuseI think I could fall in love with someone like you. you write like cello music. beautiful! |
| poet tree 2007-04-26 ch 1, | abuseEveryone is a victim of class. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abusewow, your poems are always so rich in imagery. i love the line about her knowing the right way to wear fur. and i kind of feel like everyone comes to a point where they feel like they haven't written anything good in years... |
| Bleached Roses 2007-04-17 ch 1, | abuseI can't really explain what I felt from this... perhaps I sense a struggle? Like she was desperately trying to find beauty in his touch, but it was extinct? That's just my take on things, but I'd love to know what your thoughts were. |
| classic violet 2007-03-17 ch 1, | abuseSecond & last stanzas are my favorite. adore the title. |
| the naked civil servant 2007-02-02 ch 1, | abusei loved this so much probably because it was so worryingly familiar. you know, when you're being pseudo-philosophical about life and Art and the guy's just trying to feel you up with no pretense that he's listening. the imagery was really wistful and perfect - "irridescent thighs" & "grey stone" were gorgeous. |
| elvenstorm 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful piece. Really love the way it's so abstract and sorrowful. Well done x |
| boy that you loved 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abuseI get the feeling of an uncomfortable silence preceeding this exchange of consciousness (yet again, i would presume i am wrong in my assumptions), and yet 'the right way to wear fur' seems to spur me on in my flawed interpretations of your work. I must thank you for providing me with somewhere to escape to. I appreciate you(')r(e) art. 'aptmyn, aptmyd, aptmyae, batditwwshfh' |
| Frore 2007-01-09 ch 1, | abuseVery nice work! Enigmatic Arsenic told me about you in a review for "Snow White" and I could not resist checking you out. Glad I did! Good stuff. |
| a lonely september 2007-01-07 ch 1, | abusethis is so... abstract. theres a lot to this poem. im not gonna pretend to understand it right, cos i probably dont, but it really makes me think. i like the third stanza. and the last two lines. 'as he polishes the grey stone / of his yesterday lover'. |
| summerbee 2006-12-22 ch 1, | abuseamazing. as usual. the last two lines are sad and pretty, in a melancholic and nostalgic way, and i like 'she exclaims abstractly' - it's...unusual. oh, but one thing- 'it used to be a beautiful fact' - 'fact' seems a little out of place. |
| Amber Seguin 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseVery beautiful... It's funny because I can almost relate to it, anywho it's very well written and of course poetic ;) |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-12-19 ch 1, | abuseTruly vivid, and intellectually interesting. I like how you've brought the scene out, and related it to the greater whole. Nice personal detail that you've woven through this to connect the reader to the individuals involved. Great write. |
| FunkyFlower16 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuseinteresting piece. the imagery is very different and overall, it flows pretty good :P ~mez~ |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-17 ch 1, | abuseInteresting piece. I do love the line "iredescent thighs from her mother" because it's such a fascinating image, and the last stanza is just beautiful. Your author's note is fantastic, as well. Keep writing! :) |