 Forsvint 2007-01-21 . chapter 1This was interesting. Very interesting. The thing I loved most was that epitaph. I read it over several times. The structure of the story makes it sound more like a history report, though I loved Annie and Neal in the cemetery. Their separate points of view were executed rather effectively. Yet, I was curious about George and who he was to Annie. And, was also a little more curious about the mysterious illness that claimed Elizabeth's life. Small discrepancy in the text, don't know if you noticed it. At then end of the section dealing with Elizabeth, you typed "She died on November 16, 1989..." Yes, I did a double take there. You may want to fix it :) Overall, the story sounded like a fun project. Inspired me into wanting to take a deeper look into Tallahassee for more of its spooky secrets. |