I really liked the last four lines of this poem.

SirScott

Aw, I like this piece. I can feel the deperation and all the emotion boiling up inside of you. Excellent.

Thanks for all the reviews. You're amazing!

Rowan.

Wow, I really liked this. You really got the desperation of this person. I kinda got that he's dead, or dying, and the other form was either his ghost. Either that or he's the ghost watching his body die. Or something ;) I love the repetition of the title.

Ps. If you have time it'd be great if you could look at some of my stuff too. Thanks!