Great addition. Nice work.

Twilight Starr

Great job on description. It's sad. My favorite part is "beauty of the blade". Nice work.

Twilight Starr

Very descripitive, I like that. I also like how you describe cutting in an aesthetically pleasing way (not saying that I cut but it's a nice way to write about it) It's a nice repetition going on too.

Is Teddy Bear around?

Hate the topic. Good writing. Sad subject.

Excellent! I love it! Keep it up!

Beautiful reference to the wonder that is blood! And of course a blood stained blade! The second chapter is a revision? Coll I'll check it out!

odd piece. i hope you dont actually mutilate yourself. but, i liked the line of shimmer in the light, great red and silver. very nice. oh, btw, you should change your word fropm perticular to particular. peace