...COOL!!

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Oh that's really cool! With every story you continue to get better at this writing thing. Everything just flows perfectly and I really like this story. It's different from your other ones, this and 'Bullet Proof' are probably my favorites. I like the whole prophecies going on in most of your stories too. Are they all going to tie together sometime?

Ah, so he was a God. Shiny idea, I never thought to write about any of the gods on my planet-thing. That could make for some interesting stories.

Keep up the good work!

Katz~

"They were more than just copper-colored; they were centuries deep, intriguing, and at that moment, wide with concealed fright lying just beyond the surface."

Great description! Now that's what I like to see. Perfect example of "showing" and not "telling."

Keep going with this. =)

Interesting story - I love gaiaonline contests. XD

I am glad that you describe things. Maybe try to throw in a little sensory detail?

Ah, Twilight by Stephenie Meyer...

I've read many vampire books, and that is one of my least favorites. I would use her writing style to demonstrate exactly how NOT to write, because I found the entire thing very flat, underdeveloped, and boring.

Now, "At Twilight" by Maggie Shayne is an entirely different story, so long as you have a tolerance for a little sexual content. Very gripping. I highly recommend it.

Anyway!

I will read on to the next chapter. Keep writing!