aww thats really sweet and i am glad that you wrote it in english

Nice job. I can tell you were really thinking about this person when you wrote this. Great job, but if you don't mind me saying, your sentences are little off at times. But still great job transitioning from french to english.

='( so sad... This is much better than the other one. Just a couple of mistakes:

ninth line: "Something good happen"

Should be: "Something good will happen" or "something good happens"

fifteenth line: "Why I don’t say it to you at that time?"

Should be: Why didn't I say it to you at that time?"

seventeenth line: "I remember your voice, you laugh"

Should be: I remember your voice, your laugh"

twentieth line: "I hope that when I’ll come back"

Should be: "I hope that when I come back"

But other than that, it's excellent! Such a beautiful poem. Very good imagery. Especially in the lines

"Distance between us

Seems like an ocean"

I love this poem!

*~Black and White Dreams~*