I quite enjoyed this. Very atmospheric, and I like the way you've captured the flicker-shift of hallucinations.

One possible crit: was it intentional that you described the cigarette pack as a 'cartoon', or was it a typo? Also, a carton's a box of ten packs, and what you take the individual cigs out of is a pack. Unless that's a regional dialect thing like 'pop' versus 'soda'. :D

Wow, good one! I assume your proffesor gave you a good grade for this (or will give)
Anyhow, onto the story; Eventhough we only got a fishy bloke standing at a beach for a "minute of an hour", it never gets dull. At all. Which you deserve praise for, because everything it made so interesting from his peculiar eyes. The dialouges he has with his sister (whom I really like ^^) and that friend are very interesting to see and observe his behaviour.

But he lied to her in the end >_< *cranky* Bad brother!!

A good one-shot! Keep on writing!

interesting

: )

DH

This is delicious. Sets in the mind an image of drifting that me along. It feels long, but pases quickly and...I'm not really sure what I'm trying to say, but this does produce one heck of an interesting effect. Great work.

Really, really good. This saved my mind tonight. :)

That was pretty cool. I like how his watch had been broken the whole time.