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| Bacon Lady 2007-02-08 ch 3,  | abuseI like it. It's exciting! MORE MORE MORE! *frothes at the mouth* |
| Casey Drake 2007-01-05 ch 1, | abuseInteresting plot. However, you tell a bit more than you show... *shrug* And a little more description (not purple description, just... what are tones of voices, gestures, as the characters speak? Stuff like that) would not go amiss. Otherwise, nice. :) CD |
| Crimson Orchard 2006-12-13 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting start. very realistic. Keep up the good work. ~Suna |