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| Bleh 2008-07-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseSO SWEET! I love this. ^^ You have a gift for writing poetry. It's very good. Very good. I want more. |
| wanchoo 2008-06-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is really sweet. You can find deeper meaning if you just poke past the surface. You were going for that, right? |
| Death-Tap 2007-11-12 ch 1,  | abuseOverall - Wonderful Critical - The flow breaks up on your last lines of the bottom 2 stanzas. You break the flow by adding more words in. Sort of like what Robin Robertson does to emphasize a particular thought. It starts of more like a song, and ends up getting stuttered a little, but forces the reader to read the last stanza again (which is particularly clever in my honets opinion). If that is what you are going for, then it's all good. Fantastic, as usual, your poems somehow manage to make me smile. |
| Ross Sweeney 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseHey! Thanks for the review, and this is me returning the favour :D I quite liked this; it's just nice, y'know? The first verse in particularly is a really lovely piece of imagery. Well done! And why haven't you written more?!?! :O |
| Melancholy Demon 2007-04-14 ch 1, | abusei like it, its happy! |
| Rurouni Sano 2007-01-09 ch 1, | abuseI didn't really think someone like you would do poetry. I'm no judge of it (cosidering that I don't write poetry), but it is very good in my opinion. Funny. The thought of you writing a romantic poem. No offense. Please don't hit me. |
| ChildeOfChaos 2006-12-14 ch 1, | abuseAww, how sweet. I really loved the first stanza. |