Jealous much? Oh well. It was formatted correctly and I could tell by Readig that you were jealous of someone.

Hey,

GREAT WRITING!

It's been a long time since we've talked last and I'm wondering how well you're doing? I've had a bad marriage, which is about to end up in divorce. I've tried my best to do what the Lord wants me to do in this situation ... but I don't know what to do.

I would like to get in contact with you sometime ... if that's not impossible ...

Your pal,

Sam

HOLY SMOKES! Awesome, awesome, awesome. You have stunning imagery. I love the play with the nursery rhyme and Jack Frost. Incredible. I enjoyed it mucho.

wow... a smile will sit on my face and enjoy how clever you are. very nice!

haha, I had to read this over to understand it well, but I really like it! it's funny but makes you think as well.

Hi! Good to see you came back, even if it were for only a little bit.

I don't have any ill-thoughts toward this piece, I think it's really good! (except for the title...Mary's stole? wtf is that?)

What really sticks out is the sarcasm in the poem, it makes me want to laugh-especially the caustic question at the end. In my opinion, it's a perfect way to end the poem.

Well, if you ever come back (I know I did, sigh). So did LPC, but it seems Gilee dropped off the face of the earth. Cya around...or not...:/

Lukertin.

lovely little piece and i especially liked the ending. good word usage on all the metaphors and nice emotion and feeling throughout. keep writing! :) magnus

I've missed you and your writing .

I'm not sure what to make of this piece,Sarah,I liked it because of the taunting jealous feel in it but I think it could have flowed a bit better..."you stick your heart in the microwave" was probably the prettiest line...lovely...I adore your title as well.

Its not the best piece I have read of yours but I enjoyed the way you wove some slight humor into it.

Keep writing,please post more soon.

This makes me think of some guy leaving his great girlfriend for some fake bimbo, who he's now obsesses with and being used by. Either he doesn't know or doesn't care that he's on the same level as all the other peas and carrots in her life and that she only has time for him when she feels like it.

The whole play on the "Mary has a little lamb" theme or the whole twist on it is great. I love the slight humor in this.

I can see how you were unsure with the ending. It lacks a little of the impact the rest of the poem had. The same idea can be gotten across but maybe in a different manner I think. But I do like how you ended it with a question...this ending in finally some kind of confrontation, enlightenment of the situation. Very well done.

Hey sarah, it's been a while. Keep in touch :p

I really liked it, but it does need a better ending. All the frost and icy snow was refreshing for some reason. I'd live in a freezer if I could.

Fictionpress has changed a lot. I'm never on here anymore, it got too commercialized and fake. Perhaps it always was fake... but there are too many ads, and the general atmosphere is too happy.

I don't hardly write anymore, it kind of makes me sad, but work and school take too much time. anyhow, you're a good writer, don't stop forever, like I have.

I've got some stuff up since you and I last talked. If you're interested, I think you'd like "kyoto rainforest"

anyhow, drop me a line, if you don't remember my address, it's on my profile. I'd be happy to hear from you.

Good things,

sean

nicely written. if i'm not mistaken it's a parallel to some barbie-esque girl who used a guy? and some someone else standing on the side lines and watching it all, possibly liking the guy?

anyway check the spelling of your summary and the grammar of the actual poem. keep up the great work (: