Beautiful.

I like the phrase "this fool's dance of mine." The main comparison in this poem is pretty good.

Good job.

This is actually pretty brilliant. I love how the whole thing is symbolic of life (or at least that's what I think it's about, it's good that you keep the topic un-obvious). Has good rhythm and figurative language.

Aw. I love this piece. I totally understand and relate to this. D I can't dance for my life!

Rowan.

I never was good at dancing, so I liked this poem.

SirScott

This is really cool. I adore the way you've written it. :) Write on!

Anna _