 sirskipsalot 2006-12-13 . chapter 1I like it. I feel like theres some sort of story behind it. The word bleed REALLY pops out to me. Probably because its used too much. That would really be my only criticism. But I feel like that makes up the 'meat' of the poem, if you will, and that the fact the word pops out is what you meant to do. |