Wow, I like the way that you included the rhyme when you wrote the story.

Keep it up.

Thanks for reviewing.

A very good portrayal of a friendship turned love, and how loss affected the one left behind. One spelling error: it's "noticed" not "notised". Other than that; your writing is very good!
Well done!

Wow...haunting and beautifully written.

Ohh. I like this a lot. It really flowed; it was written very well. I suppose I just like things like this. Brilliant.

aaw

that's a depressing version of the fairytale, but then life can't be all mother goose eh?

Wow.. That was brilliant. I loved how this sounded. The wording, the plot, all of it simply amazing. Good job.