this is an interesting piece, and an interesting idea behind it. Well written.
However, you've already submitted this before. stories and poems are coming in quick today and yours got pushed off the Just In page. I understand the feeling. But mine hasn't even showed up and I posted half an hour ago.

Wow, this is nice. A little rougher than I'm used to, but roughness can be really nice in poetry. It's certainly interesting, that's for sure. The title is one of the more interesting I've seen today. Great images throughout, and just nice. Keep writing! :)