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| TeaWithOnions 2007-01-26 ch 1,  | abuseAw! I LOVED this! The narrator is so funny, and I just think the whole idea of an obsession with the coffee guy is great. He seemed very nice. Nice job, I'm favoriting this. |
| a bitter kiss. 2006-12-26 ch 1, | abuseHaha, what's funny is that the first story I read I started relating it to a cafe, Starbucks-ish... and haha, I read this and it's set in a cafe-Starbucks-ish place. Haha. :D Another lovely read. Although yes, I didn't get any humor lines in this piece, it was still great. :D Your pieces are so mellow to read, and they're so pleasing. :) |
| CHIIJOY 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseAww, I loved it. But real experiences in fiction are cool too. Great job. :D |
| Aimers 2006-12-17 ch 1, | abuseThe ending is hilarious. Sweet and quirky; nice! |
| CitizenOfZozo 2006-12-16 ch 1, | abuseI like the humanity of the narrator, the little quirks involved in the exchange. I actually didn't get the impression of comedy with most of this piece, rather just a brief narrative. There are amusing observations, but none of the side comments that really define a truly comedic piece. As a result, the closing line didn't flow with the rest so well, but the rest was nicely written. |