"But now, it was spring in the Middle Kingdoms. Yenosha loved spring, because to him, he felt like his soul was opening to a new life."

Really nice imagery there, and I like it. Yenosha is a neat boy, and I'm really glad you didn't take the obvious route of focusing almost entirely on his very negative past and his feelings of neglect and self loathing. Of course, his thoughts and attitudes were stained by his past, and this comes across quite well.

This is only the first chapter, correct?
A good start, good characters. I wanna know a bit more about arriene :)

Pretty good! Sure, there are a few mistakes here and there (like grammar and the nonexistent word "arse"), but nothing major. I understood what you were saying and didn't encounter any confusion upon reading your story ;) Again, you have very good details, and I hope you continue to keep up the good work!