"We walked towards the palace, through the park. The lake to my left is an inky black and I think how easy it would be for him to push me in. He seems me along the path, dark under the canopy of the trees the gravel making a chewing sound of teeth on teeth, biting through the night silence. My heels are fabric covered, sinking into the path but I don’t say anything and he doesn’t seem to notice. Perhaps he likes it that way, to have me leaning on him for support."

Aside from the "He seems me along the path," which still sort of baffles me, passages like this have a real feel of quality writing.

The begining of this story is quite compelling. It certainly drew me in. You do a very good job of evoking a mood and a scene. I find myself personally interested in the MC too.

I will say that I was mildly disappointed in the resolution of the story; a plot like this can only be served well by much more detail.

All in all I like your style.

Aha I love it!

It's cool how you kinda let little bits of info slip at a time, instead of letting it all out at once.

There were a few spelling mistakes I noticed, like 'hansom' should be 'handsome', 'tiered' should be 'tired' and 'a little to elegant to be approachable' - the 'to' should be 'too'. Aside from these few things it's pretty well written I think!

I love how you keep mentioning the lemon; it works really well. I feel like this short story would make a great prequel for a longer story about a spy. Haha. I really liked it. :)

-Slim

Fantastic, i love the twist at the end. Really well written as well, I love some of the descriptions