AWWH. so cute and heartfelt. I loved this part:

"...I ** him.” I let my head drop down so my chin was against my collar bone and I studied the green sweatshirt I was wearing.

“Don’t you mean he ** you?” I asked in a conversational tone.

“No, I got on top of him and ** him.”

BAHAHAHA! I find that amazing... mostly because it's something I could see myself, or other similarly Emotionally Semi**ed Real People actually saying. As if it's actually important; but still, you just HAVE to say that, and somehow, because your characters work so well together, it isn't awkward at all. It's amusing, and truthful, and somewhere underneath it all... kind of sad? I feel like I understand this story as its own being-- one of my best friends (my... ex-girlfriend, actually) got pregnant at fifteen. So... I know how that works. And it makes the whole LOVE QUADRANGLE plot that much more deeper and interesting.

I also understand from the point of view of a three-year NaNoWriMo victim. *feels pain* :]

Anyway, GO ANGST! GO DRAMA! Especially GO SLASH (omg cannot wait) And I'm so, so terribly sorry it took about fifteen bazillion years to return your review. I'm a dumb douche. But, belated or not, I do appreciate it... and I hope you continue this story so I can appreciate it even more. :]

Good start ^^. I find John and Gabby's relationship interesting. It seems complicated. I hope you update soon.