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| the naked civil servant 2007-02-02 ch 1,  | abuseso perfect and bitter. the last line is to die for... |
| lessons you learn 2007-01-04 ch 1, | abuse...*favs* I'm running out of words to describe your writing with. |
| Ellin Louise 2007-01-02 ch 1, | abuseThe contrast is very effective here, with the word (but) separating the two verses, the line "credit card offers, and condoms" is a also a strong contrast. |
| Zero-Sum 2007-01-01 ch 1, | abusewonderful imagery |
| alice is dying 2006-12-26 ch 1, | abuseGorgeous, with a homey feel to it-I picture a sour love affair and lying awake with insomnia afterwards, listening to mom whispering in an ear with wise advice. Your writing lets me relax and get comfortable-I'm able to enjoy the poem. And I DO enjoy your poetry. Lovely. ♥ Alice |
| les petits bateaux 2006-12-20 ch 1, | abuseoh my. somewhere in between this, i feel so tranquil after reading this. i think it might be because of the sorrow of it all at the ending. witty. very witty. :) |
| dress her up in fairytales 2006-12-19 ch 1, | abuselove the ending. mysterious. |
| a Leader by Default 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuseYou have real talent. Make sure it doesn't go to waste. |
| Asagao 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abusebravo! |
| poetic abortion 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuse[fav] The whole southern flav has it all. For me, that was just gold. And, oh; those first three lines were brilliant. Love. - Noelle |
| Aquafied 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abusered nail polish how appropriate |
| lackluster 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abusethe last 3 lines have that southern accent on them; in a way it adds such a solid presence to the poem. and i adore the first stanza. bytheway: i love your new name. |
| a lonely september 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuse**. another one that makes my head spin. how do you do it? how? it's so incredible . passion red, she pretends he's going to keep her. oh, that hits. the ending. that hit, too. this is all incredible. |
| contrast and friction 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abuseThis is well written. The last line is so .. broken and bitter, and it has finality about it. Beautiful. |
| cocaine and cherries 2006-12-18 ch 1, | abusei LOVE that last part, it's so sarcasticbitter, a line you throw over your shoulder while you walk away. gah. |