Yay! Finally a poem about rebirth that is not about cutting or suicide! First, I like that it was in third person. I read a lot of poems in first person and rarely like them. Because it feels like the poet is trying to hard to express his emotions. I liked that it was in third person because it added mystery to it and just got my attention.
There were some lines that were nine syallables instead of 10. Like the first line but I think that is all. And when you said "and that life will simply return to form". I do not really think "form", fits very well. Maybe some like "norm". But that is just me.
Other then those nick picky things. I do not see anything wrong with it. It was well written, and was not the cliche crap about cutting and death that I keep seeing all over the place. Well done.
I do not know why. Maybe its because of my Dorian Gray obsession, but is it about Dorian Gray? XD It reminded me of it with "looking upon an unpleasant sight", "having impaired judgement", and "wishing his sins could be repent". Man, I really am obsessed...