 burning in effigy 2006-12-27 . chapter 1very pretty imagery, actually makes me think about dancing angels :)
it's short, but it's very very sweet and it has a tone to it that makes it have a song-like quality to it
you've reviewed me a while ago, and i can't remember who've i reviewed back and who i haven't but what the heck.
lovely poem :) |
 Undead Serenade 2006-12-18 . chapter 1The imagery is pretty here. Basic, but very straight-forward (which can be good in some cases). I haven't heard/seen what you talked about in your summary so I can't rely on that to help me balance out the worthiness or whatever.
You probably could add a bit more substance to the poem, like underlying tones (which you already have me considering many different things behind it) or some idea beyond to who the speaker is in the poem. Nevertheless, it's an easy piece and gets the idea that you're jotting out things because you've been inspired, even if you're not very inclined to rhyme or patch up and complicate it. |