im excited for this. beautifully written. oh by the way, u might want to undo the no anynomous reviews thingy. :D

i really like the intro to this story. very unique, and it really captured my attention. keep up the great work!

Okay, I was starting to get bored when you showed the stuff with Brandon, it felt stereotypical and uninteresting as though I'd seen it all before (especially the girlfriend part; that word "girlfriend" seems strangely out of place in this setting, maybe "mistress" would be more appropriate based on the relationship). However, my interest was captured again when you revealed "Marianna" knew Adelle as a little girl and that she and her "servant" are pulling off an enormously ambitious scam. Their plans seems a little shaky, potentially contrived, but the enormity of the intrigue is drawing me in, especially that last ominous phrase about never doing intentional harm. Almost made me shiver.

Btw: "He hugged her quickly and pressed her lips to her ear" - I think you mean "his lips".

I'll be watching for your update!

An elegant prologue that sets up both mystery and the slightest thrill of something beautifully sinister. The narrative voice for this prologue has a lilting tone in the repetition of the variant "so they say" phrase that is reminiscent of oral tradition/folklore and even a little of the tide, which is a very nice extension of the pseudo-mermaid theme.

woah beautiful intro. it was very catchy and i definetly want to read more. but i have a feeling the ending the prince and the girl wont end up together. just a guess. update!

Very well done prologue. I am liking this. (Description is phenomenal!)

Whoa! Love the intro! I have to know more to this story now! Keep up the good work!