very good, very real. I liked it. Keep it up :)
Faith

that was so sad it was like you could feel your heart breaking through it all it was really good

Woho geez, take it easy XD The display is too angsty for the reason (as you said. Well it takes away from the feeling, see?)...and the dots...are...very much...unnecessary...in...most...places. The language is beautiful, I like it. The descriptions are also good. Good job!