I loved it. It was very well written and very creative. I especially loved the part about your mother.

i think it's pretyt clever although i don't get all of it, but that's becasue i hate bussiness, but hey whatever. hey this is kaitlyn, you know that one weird girl in your gym class. anyways i just got a story on here...finally it toko me long enough. anyways if you have nothing to do, check it out pen name:fatbird33. Sorry i'm not capitilizing my I's it's just a habit.

uh... what. and i put that period in on purpose just to confuse you as much as this story confused me

I haven't laughed this hard in a while. The ready-to-please attitude of the salesman combined with soulselling is surely a comedy hit. Nearly every line is a classic, I think I'm going to have to favourite it.

Well done, certianly original.

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This is very funny, it's a well written and original parody. I especially like the ending, and you've gotten the salesperson voice down perfectly. It's not your fault, but I think I should point out that the percentage signs didn't appear when you posted this.

That's hilarious. I've gotta try that sometime...