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| Midnight In Eden 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseFirst off it's porcelain, not porceline. Also, interesting idea but it's a bit of a tired metaphor, the doll: abandoned, broken etc. I think if you played with it a little more and tried to freshen the metaphor than it could be very interesting. .:midnight:. |
| Inkspilled 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseIt seems really good. Just a little flat? I dunno, some parts seem slightly emotionless. I don't know how much work you put into it, but in one way it's good and in others it could be lacking something...Maybe it's just because of the topic. Doesn't mean it's bad or anything. |
| Incognito Flamingo 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseWhoa! I liked it! |
| Tricksters Illusion 2006-12-21 ch 1, | abuseThat was awesome. ^_^ |