Aw! Cute and sweet and brave. Thanks for the one-shot!

adorable, i loved it

heya, this is a great set of one-shots so far, i really do like how the brother hid in the car in this one. i can't wait for more. it would be interesting to see if you could write a whole story based around the ideas in this one-shot, how they were together and then he left, and what she did while he was gone etc maybe. i dunno, just a thought. cya later ~ Alenor.

THE ENDING RULED!
haha specially with what Peter said! so funny! but SO sweet! Fab job!

~RL~

aw. . .it's so cute. I love the ending.

hahaa...well they sure got it sorted between them...well can't believe that its finished..well going to go now...well loved it..peace out gurl...bye-bye then...:D..

Wow. That's rough. Great story, though!

Love the ending. It was a good story. Somewhat sad yet funny at the same time! Keep up the good work!

Hm, maybe for this to improve you should add more details instead of having it all talk, like apprearances, settings and such to give the reader and clearer picutre in their mind.

i hope that helps.

I really like this!! it made me smile!!

Keep writing and take care.

~Claire