Oh, wow...! This is a wonderful and captivating start to a book. I dont think I've ever come across a story I'd love to read more. I cant wait to see what your plans are for this.

An interesting beginning. However, there are some parts of the story that just rub me the wrong way.

First, what's with the present-tense? It seems weird. That could just be me, though.

Second, this entire scene reminds me of a scene in Star Trek: First Contact wherein the medical staff are taking a woman from the past (Or, in this scene, Jeff) who has no clue what's going on through the Jefferies tubes (jeftun) and escaping from the Borg (Tos-Loven). I mean, it seems almost like plagarism. The Tos-Loven even act like the Borg in their quest for perfection and their ways of attaching organic with synthetic.

You do have some very interesting back-stories and a rich history to draw from, if your other postings on the "Isle of Dreams" show how you've developed it.

I also appreciate the lack of spelling and grammar errors.