Woah! I can understand him somehow...
I like it! Just because she's 14 doesn't mean she couldn't love someone with all her heart. There's so much more to this little oneshot but I figure you know the meaning of your own fic! ;)
I love it!^^

Wow, that was intense, and a good piece of writing.
Origami? hahah, somehow I don't think so.

Keep it up.
Tiz.

Wow.. That story is so short and yet full of power and emotion.. I only hope that someday I can write something like that. Something that can hit the reader within moments of beginning to read :-D Well done, I'm in awe of your work...